Testmagic Essays On The Great

Most Common TOEFL Essay Mistakes, Part 1

TestMagic has given score estimates to thousands of TOEFL essays since 1998, both on-line and in our TOEFL classes. Over the years, we have seen a lot of the same mistakes over and over again, and have put together some tips to help you.

Here's the first mistake, although it is not necessarily the most common mistake or the most important one:

Failure to restate the topic

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We see a lot of essays that start like this:

Yes, I agree wholeheartedly with this point. This issue is a very important one, and I agree with it for several important reasons.

First, …

Can you figure out why this essay introduction is not good? It sounds pretty good. The grammar is good. So what's wrong with it?

This introduction is not good for the TOEFL because it does not introduce the reader to the topic. In other words, after we read this introduction, we are not sure what the essay is going to be about.

The person who writes an essay introductoin like this is probably thinking that the reader already knows the essay prompt (the "question" or topic of the essay) and doesn't think that she needs to restate the topic.

For the TOEFL essay, it is most certainly true that the reader of your essay does know what the essay prompt is, but the TOEFL test taker must still introduce the topic of the essay in the introduction.

The rule of thumb in English (our English teachers tell us this over and over) is that we should write the essay as if the reader had no previous knowledge of the topic we are writing about. This means that you should be sure to restate the essay prompt (it's best to paraphrase the prompt, not copy it word for word) and to explain the things in the essay that the average reader would not know about.

If you really do not know how to restate the topic, and you only need a TOEFL score of 4.0 or maybe 5.0, you could simply copy part of the prompt in your introduction.

Let's look at the simplest way to do this.

Imagine that our TOEFL essay topic is something like "do you agree or disagree that learning about the past is not important?"

In a perfect world, you would paraphrase (restate in your own words) the essay prompt when you wrote your introduction, something like this:

Although many believe that we should live in the present, I strongly believe that the past holds valuable lessons for everybody to learn.

First, ...

However, for some people, doing this may be difficult, especially if they are still learning English. (Actually, we're all still learning English, but you know what I mean.)

So, if you need something simpler, the easiest way to restate the topic would be to copy the words exactly as they appear in the essay prompt, but make them fit in your introduction:

I strongly disagree that learning about the past is not important. This issue is a very important one, and I disagree with it for several important reasons.

First, …

This intro is not great writing, but it at least tells us what the essay is going to be about.

That's it for this tip. I hope it helped!

Any questions? Ask in the TestMagic Forum!

I am going to see a movie with my friend. (This sentence means you have only one friend in the whole world; you need to say one of my friends.)

I was very good at soccer when I was high school. (This sentence means that in the past you were not human—you were a high school. You need to use a preposition here, When I was in high school.)

The more people exercise, the younger they will be. (Of course, exercise cannot make you younger. It can make you feel younger, but actually making someone younger is impossible.)

I am fortunate to be able to spend a lot of time with my children. I can teach them everything about Korea. (Of course, it is impossible to teach or even know everything about Korea or any country. We should change it to many things.)

I would like to study in America because all modern technology originated there. (all means 100%; we cannot say that absolutely every new thing started in America; just to be safe, you should use many or most.

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